Let America be America again

1. Image of Farms, Martin Luther King, old time immigrants, dust bowl ...
2.He says that America does not promise anything, but the American dream can survive
3.pioneer on the plain, "freedom" from tyrants/kings, poor Negro, displaced red man, gold seekers, farmers, hard working laborers,
4. conniving tyrants, lack of equality, dog-eat-dog/ fend for your self = low resources, greed, slavery, lack of rights for protest and low pay,
5. in 1935 America differed from today: 1935, I believe only certain people had rights to vote, not women, not blacks, etc.  Economics  were affected from the depression, ...
6. that he never experienced the upside of the "American dream"
7. Pioneers,poor working white man, black men, Native Americans, immigrants, claim seekers,  WHY:  because lack of equality, lack of good payment, greed
8. Yes, I don't see anything about women or children, but he does generalize "workers" ....
9. Tone change - started softer then hit harder in the middle and change entirely at the end.  He gave example of the disappointment of the American dreams, in the middle of the poem, then said  "America will be" stating that what he was comparing the rest to, can still be possible.
10. I think this poem expresses both sides.  It can seem like a negative portrayal, but  it also seems like we have the ability to change it (this is a positive feeling)
11. The themes, still have relevance today.  I think the issues are still very similar.
12. Has American filled it's potential?::  No, I think that we can consider reaching our fullest potential if we are ranked in the top nations for almost  everything that is rated as a nation, like: Education, healthcare, murder rate, literacy, poverty.   I think we are trying to reach this potential, which can in ways be someone's dream - just doing what they can to help - they singly could be maxed out, but I don't feel as a nation we have reached our potential.

Reading Post pg 110-127

Summary of pg110-127

Style in Argument:

Choice of style should address a specific audience/Choosing the appropriate expression for your rhetoric/Adjust style/voice to your audience

Tone

word choice

voice

syntax, metaphors, imagery...

Plain style: when you use the language of the reader

high style: using sophisticated concepts/ words , only educated reader would understand

Create a Persona:

A deliberately crafted version of yourself

Choosing a Rhetorical Stance:

Position

Crafting a Position Paper:

A paper about your opinion on an issue

Includes:

     Introduction 

    Strong Assertion of position

    Fair counterarguements 

    Conclusion

Composing A Title:

Before or After

1. should clarify essay topic

2. capture attention 

Composing Introduction:

establish:

tone

voice

persona

stance

~background

~1st articulation of argument

hook:  

pg122

Write Conclusion:

reinforce argument while making lasting impact

1. signal end

2. reiterating main point

3. more robust, engaging.. by

     key quotation

     return to example

    chronological structure

    suggest broader implication that could increase reader sense of importance of topic

    ~call to action

Analyzing Position Paper:

pg126

  

 

Grammar Girl #2

1.  What I know:
 "it"  can be vague.  When people don't know what to call a fetus in the womb,  "it" is awkwardly used sometimes.

2.  Grammar Girl Episode #517 - Cut "It" Out

http://www.quickanddirtytips.com/education/grammar/do-your-readers-a-favor-cut-%E2%80%98it%E2%80%99-out

3 & 4.  http://www.huffingtonpost.com/2014/06/09/these-words-are-so-overus_n_5447356.html   Paragraph 5

Once every other song on the Top 40 station reverberates with nasal Auto-Tune, it no longer seems groundbreaking and hip, but the first artists to use it, like Cher, were thinking outside the box, finding beauty in a new and bizarre tool. 

The first "it" in the paragraph could be confusing, because someone could try to refer "it" back to either the Top 40 station or the nasal Auto-Tune.  By the second "it" I became more aware that the author is referring to the Auto-Tune because he writes that artists use "it".  I'm not saying that clarification is absolutely needed, but the author could have been more specific if he wanted to.

...reverberates with nasal Auto-Tune, the sound no longer seems groundbreaking..

What I learned:  It" is used in a lot of places where a different word could go, to clarify what you are referring to.  The writer could keep the reader focused more if the word "it" is cut out of the sentence when it's simple to define what "it" is. 

Response to Obnoxious Feedom Analysis

Introduction:  - Morning on Jan 7, two brother entered the office of Charlie Hebdo. They killed 12 people.  The brothers identified as memebers of Al Qaeda.  They considered a cartoon published by Charlie to be disrespectful to Islam and Mohammed.  

Anecdote


Conclusion: Alerting Americans to guard freedoms just as the cartoonists of Charlie Hedso do with Obnoxious cartoons.

Summary and final thought

effective?: yes.

In-class Ad Analysis

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jx6i2MkYUCw

1. What is the main type of appeal for this commercial?  

Logos

1. What fallacies did you find within the commercial? 

• Begging the question (Circular logic that uses itself as evidence)

1. How might the inclusion of these fallacies encourage the audience who is watching the commercial?  

This fallacy can encourage the audience, because it follows a order, clean then rest - that makes sense.  The item's name is "Mr. Clean"

1. How might the inclusion of these fallacies dissuade the audience who is watching the commercial? 

That Mr. Clean  as a person, can actually do the cleaning ...

1. Does your own identification of the fallacies dissuade or encourage you personally?

Encourages me,  I'll take a change on Mr. Clean merchandise 

Punctuation #318

1.  I know that punctuation is used to clarify or organize thoughts.  It can also enhance the meaning of someone's writing. I want to refresh on the usage of commas, since I tend to over use them, and to know the difference between using a dash and colon.  


2.  I did not find podcast #318.  I was only able to read the article.
http://www.quickanddirtytips.com/education/grammar/dashes-colons-and-commas

3. & 4. 

AnonymousNovember 14, 2013 at 1:29 PM

Made it, very easy and delicious~I put the entire bag of cranberries in the cake, and also zested with orange, delish!!! Donna

Reply

http://www.barefeetinthekitchen.com/2011/12/cranberry-christmas-cake.html

The article said that commas, colons, and dashes can be used in place of each other.  I believe the statement above used them satisfactorily, but her effect could have been better if she used them differently.  Example:  (obviously sentence structure could be better as well, but I'm going to try to leave it as she wrote it).  Made it, very easy and delicious: I put the entire bag of cranberries in the cake and zested with orange - delish!!!  


5.  What I learned:

Dashes create a dramatic tone.  I don't need to capitalize after a dash.  I can think of the dash as a comma in this way.

Dashes, colons, and commas can interchange either, but they each can change the tone of the sentence.